Project #4 Group Critique Write Up for Kathleen Zimmerman

The rough draft of Kathleen’s interview was done very well! She chose to interview her mom, and from what she was saying in the interview, I believe she grew up in the 80s. The theme of Ready Player One is based off of 80s technology and culture, so her interview connected perfectly with the novel. Especially when her mom started talking about PacMan and other video games that they would go play at Pizza Hut. That put me back into some of the scenes of the novel where Parzival was playing the arcade games inside the OASIS

I think Kathleen’s interview was a nice conversation, and didn’t feel like a stiff, formal interview. Many of the StoryCorps projects are exactly like this, just a conversation where you get to hear the opinion or a story of someone you care about. It might be nice to have Kathleen talk a bit, so there is some context about the questions that she asked her mom. Other than that, there was a nice flow to the story. Some transitions might be helpful to step it up to the next level!

As mentioned above, I think adding some transitions to the audio story would be helpful in recognizing its context. The quality of the audio recording is very good and clear. It might be nice to hear Kathleen asking her mom these questions so it feel like a true conversation, which is what StoryCorps stories are like.

There is no intro or supplementary sound yet, but I think adding both of these things to the interview would really set the tone for the story. Have an introduction of Kathleen talking about who she interviewed to give some more context. Then, maybe adding some nice music to keep the story upbeat so it has a positive tone to it. I think with the next draft both of these things will help a lot!

I could definitely imagine this being played on the radio, especially the ending part where her mom is talking about the effects of stress on students at the high school and college level because of technology. I liked the point she made that we need to treat people like humans, we can’t just continue to pile more and more work on people because technology makes it easier to. I could see this on some type of talk show concerning stress of students and how things have changed so drastically so quickly.

Overall I can’t wait to see how the final draft turns out!

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